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PostSubject: Dofus Story from the King   Sun 2 Nov - 14:55

Alright bums it's King here. Couldn't remember my pass so i made another account XD Anyway I've been working on this Dofus Story and I have chapter 1 done so check it out whenever you can Razz

http://pcstampede.deviantart.com/art/Dofus-Story-Chapter-1-102481590

Tim said you had to have a deviant account to download it as it is a pdf file. If you cant get it and want just hit me up on msn and ill send you the Word or Pdf version.
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Sun 2 Nov - 15:22

For lazy guys like me who don't want to be deviant member, you can download .pdf there :

Chapter 1 Dofus.pdf

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Sun 2 Nov - 15:52

Well i finally read it ^^

Sorry to have been long, but i'm french -_-'

So... what I think about this story :

Well, the way you use to tell the story (talking about "players", listing all gears, quoting spells name, ...) is weird and i had some difficulties to get used to the story, but passed this first impression (after all, it was a wanted style), the story starts pretty well.

Fight is maybe too long... it's a serie of spells and i was fastly lost... but maybe it's because i'm french Wink

Anyway, I wait the 2nd chapter Razz

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Mon 3 Nov - 9:38

I agree with ell, but for me its becouse im croatian. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Wed 5 Nov - 4:17

I didnt read the name "SpaceCom" anywhere? So somehting is wrong with the story.Good story though even for those who have DnD paper and pencil background.

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Wed 5 Nov - 11:18

He toled me some ppl will come later. ^^
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Tue 11 Nov - 17:01

I knew someone *points at Spaceman* would say something about not being in it XD lol Don't worry Spaceman I already had plans for you in the story its just not here yet. Chapter 2 will be up soon.
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Wed 12 Nov - 2:38

I don't really want to reveal you the end but... well... you die space ...

Please... understand... it's to add some drama.. all that...

PS : btw King, if you want to get back your old account... just ask me... you know I can... -.-

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Wed 12 Nov - 7:56

Ellyos I need you to upload Chapter 2 for me. Log on msn whenever you can.
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Wed 12 Nov - 11:50

Okay the Chapter 2 is online.

You can get it there :
Chapter 2 Dofus

Now my impress about this chapter :

Better than first part... Fight is more interesting but maybe it's because there are more fighters in it. Anyway, it can certainly be shorted a little.

Too much "X said"... especioully disturbing when the 4 sadidettes talk in a row. Some synonyms can give more sense to the dialog. Just check some novels to find some help.

Else, the chapter has an end I pretty like Smile

I wait the chapter 3

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Fri 14 Nov - 3:13

arfffffff.
When the four sadidettes where out of the bushes I was looking forward something like this : Im Ruby.
Im Sapphira.
Im Emeralda.
Im Diamondine. "
Now with your powers combined I'm Captain Planet!"
*song*
Captain planet he is a hero .... na nanananna....

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Fri 14 Nov - 6:07

haha space, you own lol! lol! lol!
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Fri 14 Nov - 8:22

Lol space. I was gonna make it more of a disco thing but last minute change Razz Anyway rejoice some of you make debut in chap 3. Look forward to it Razz
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Tue 18 Nov - 18:23

Btw where can I post stories that aren't dofus related Ellyos?
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Wed 19 Nov - 13:22

I can host them if you want, just create new post and send me your stories.

By the way, I don't know if you gave links of the first chapters on another forum or anywhere else, but i changed the url, so update them in case.

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Sun 23 Nov - 20:55

Chapter 3: Clan Wars is complete. Been busy so it came slower then the others. Host it for me when you can Ellyos.
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Mon 24 Nov - 11:26

>Here is the file : Dofus Chapter 3

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Mon 24 Nov - 11:42

Is there something wrong with chapter 3 or it is just for me? I get it in excel and no text there.
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Mon 24 Nov - 14:22

Weird...

Try in going there :
http://www.guildseks.com/Dofus/Includes/Downloads/KingSadida/DofusStory

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Mon 24 Nov - 18:26

ah i get it, its becouse of pdf file and i dont have adobe and someone set that pdf file is opened by excel lol! lol!
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Tue 25 Nov - 6:09

If you need the doc version just let me know Tim.
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Thu 27 Nov - 4:52

Fucking mummification spell in moowolf fight yeah bitches ^___^ playful claw in line of Boos ekekekekekekekekkeekekbest chapter ever ^^. And stupid emo eni always to late pfffff

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Fri 28 Nov - 10:02

Chapter 4 is ready when you are Ellyos. I didn't expect it to come along so fast lol!
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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Sat 29 Nov - 4:16

Here is the chapter 4 !

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PostSubject: Re: Dofus Story from the King   Thu 18 Dec - 15:37

It's christmas time so things have been slow but I've started chapter 5 so it should be done soon.
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